Monday, February 09, 2009

Project in Progress I

The smell of waffles smothered in margarine wafts towards him from a nearby food stall, watering his mouth. He remembers he forgot to eat breakfast in his haste and excitement. Today is an important day for him, and he often forgets such mundane matters like food on days like this.

He climbs the stairs to the MRT Ayala station, buys a ticket, and goes through the ticket machines. Suspended from above, the big Timex clock greets him with the time: 6:15 AM. Better early, he decides.

He takes the escalator pouring people into the already crowded platform below.

What a curious thing, the train. How it can warp time and space, how it could make life both harder and easier, the way it shrinks distances, the way it creates free time for more work.

He makes a mental note to find out the etymology of the word "train." He is someone who is fond of collecting small, useless trivia, keeping them inside his head until needed. Like candies in his pocket.

A shrill whistle from the station security guard, the urgent ringing of an alarm bell, then the train arrives, halting with a loud screech. As if on cue, the passengers turn frantic, fighting their way inside the train, pushing and jostling each other, like a single many-headed monster throwing a tantrum.

He adjusts his thick steel-rimmed glasses and joins the furious crowd.

to be continued

13 comments:

Chai said...

tumbleweeding by...

A.Dimaano said...

I'm eagerly waiting for the continuation ... this project.

Niel said...

Hmmm... a geek archetype. Looking forward to his other layers. :)

Herbs D. said...

i love the point of view-or i mean how you use a second person or whatevs you call it hahahah (zomg im sucking at english na! lol)


nice piece. more like a mini-novel on the go. :]

gentle said...

very nice, victor. wonder where this will lead. :)

VICTOR said...
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VICTOR said...

@chai: thanks for dropping by!

@mr scheez: i have a hard time moving ahead with the story. the third instalment is where the absurdity begins. lol.

@niel: yeah, your typical nerd. i'm also excited to introduce his, uh, oddities. i'm trying hard not to have a crush on him.

@herbs: i suck with first person when writing in prose. as a rule, i write through the thrid person and in the present tense as much as possible.

@thanks, gentle. i will try not to disappoint you. this is a seriously ridiculous story that will be very difficult to pull off. i am ambitious. lol.

Niel said...

"i'm trying hard not to have a crush on him."

LOL

VICTOR said...

@Niel: I have a tendency to crush on fictional persons. And I am partial to bespectacled geeks.

Niel said...

Actuall ako din. :)

Yung partner ko naka glasses. Hehehe.

VICTOR said...

@Niel: So. I wonder which of your dolls you may have a crush on... LOL.

Niel said...

AJ (the doll) was made to look like my partner :)

VICTOR said...

OMG. AJ is cute!

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